There is much more opportunity for this work to grow. I craved higher highs and lower lows, truly dark dangerous moments and truly sensual ones. It was like a dinner made without seasoning; perfectly prepared from the freshest ingredients, yet there was something missing.
There are the makings of a truly hilarious play, but what is there is funny. There just needs to be contrast, conflict, and something to give it an unpredictable kick at the end.